Odysseus (a Greek) is trying to win a war against the Trojans. He tells all the Greeks to pretend to surrender by sailing home. The Greeks build a huge, wooden horse and leave it near Troy. Odysseus and his men hide inside the wooden horse. The Trojans believe it is a gift and take into the city. At night, the Greeks sneak out of the wooden horse and slaughter the Trojans. The Greeks win the Trojan War.
My dream plan or journey would be anywhere really. It could be a place with beaches. It could be a place with trees. It could be a place with dirt. It could be a place with rocks. It could be a place with bugs. It could be a place with grass. It could be a place in space. It could be a place in America. It could be a place in India. It could be a place in Australia. It could be a place in China. It could be in a place in Japan. It could be a place in Canada. It could be a place in Mexico. It could be a place in North America. It could be a place in South America. It could be a place in Europe. It could be a place in Asia. It could be a place in Africa. It could be a place in Antarctica.
I really loved the parallel structure you used when describing the endless possibilities of "dream vacations". The identical syntax really conveys the theme well: that all places are worthy of being seen and experienced, and no place is "better" than any other. Great work!
ReplyDeleteI like the conciseness of your summary, such that it doesn't detract from your response to the prompt. In your response, I love your syntax. The repetition hits the reader hard, and really hammers your point in. It also helps the reader visualize all of the possibilities that your dream has.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the repetition of the sentences in the beginning, however I was expecting for it to lead into a better explanation. It seemed as if you never really explained why these places were your dream journey. You had a pretty adequate explanation of the Trojan horse story.
ReplyDeleteYour style really shows through with this post. Most notably, your use of parallel structure is masterful, and really brings the description together. My favorite lines are, "It could be a place with bugs," and also "It could be a place with rocks." There are the lines that really struck home to me as a person, and I'm absolutely touched at how much I can related to your message. The idea that sometimes, you just need to get away from life, and it doesn't matter where you go. Sometimes in life, you just need to move out of your own skin to find a place in the world where you belong, getting there is ones journey, very similar to Odysseus. We are all on our journey and in search of a destination. Whether it be in Antarctica, a place with trees, or a place with dirt.
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